Tutor feedback

Formative feedback

 Overall Comments

Great to be working with you on your CAN module, well done for submitting the first

assignment and making an encouraging start. We discussed your submission and

learning log in a Google Hangout tutorial on 19/04/2017. Key points discussed are

summarized below through a combination of Tutor and Student notes.

Assessment potential

You may want to get credit for your hard work and achievements with the OCA by

formally submitting your work for assessment at the end of the module. More and more

people are taking the idea of lifelong learning seriously by submitting their work for

assessment but it is entirely up to you. We are just as keen to support you whether you

study for pleasure or to gain qualifications. Please consider whether you want to put

your work forward for assessment and let me know your decision when you submit

Assignment 2. I can then give you feedback on how well your work meets the assessment



Feedback on assignment


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of


• Portfolio box presentation adds a professional touch and protects prints from damage

• Prints were consistent in treatment (borders, colour balance, full frame, as in no

inconsistent cropping of ratio) – maintain and keep furthering your attention to detail.

• Ensure presentation fits with your intentions – images were meant to be viewed in

pairs – send them in that order

• Experiment with printing and the pairing idea, may be place side by side on a

panoramic ratio paper, would be ok to fold for tutor to see as long as explained, for

assessment however, you might want to invest in a flat sleeve. Also consider paper stock

when folding and where you score the paper to avoid crumpling or creating an untidy


• Consider labeling prints on reverse, we discussed details and formatting, keeping

simple and building consistency and an identity.

• Captions – be consistent and check captions for the second set (industrial) as these

are all the same at present


• I think your inspiration for this work is interesting, coming from literature and your

previous work (could you have perhaps included some of Braggi’s words from the book

Everytown? Any particular phrases or statements that stood out to you or inspired

specific image or subject choices?)

• I can see your intentions with focusing on the contrast between the rural and

industrial, as this is clearly very evident in a place such as Rotherham with it’s industrial

history. Your contact sheets show your exploration of various sites, which for you

epitomize the contrasts the area has to offer. You’re also considering materials, surface

and function in these images, for example we get to see the contrast between brick and

metal, between stone walls and wire fences. However, if hoping to refine the work

further, I’d suggest experimenting further with the placing of the contrasts and

similarities within each pair. What else could you do to assert your own views or

ideological position on these contrasting environments? Is the industrial taking over or

‘more powerful’ than the rural in Rotherham in your opinion? How are they at odds with

each other? Are there any other ideas which could run as undercurrents through the

work? Also – are there other ways to bring pairs together, not just in the subject matter,

the top line composition elements and colour? E.g. could you subtly show vehicles in the

rural, vehicles in the industrial? Paths and roads in the industrial, desire lines or

ploughed crops (creating a pathway through a field) in the rural OR make the similarities

in the images even more alike, to really emphasise the differences… could walls or roads

be in the same place, lead the same way, within the frame and buildings or objects

framed with the same depth or placement?

• This obviously would take more time, and potentially more time than you have here,

but would be the kinds of considerations that I think would translate well into any future

project and approach to an assignment. I would say that potentially the pairs could do

with being more alike, in terms of composition/perspective and environment in order to

make those subtle observations and the intention even clearer.

• Lastly, whilst the introduction of the fences in the very close foreground works in

terms of offering variety, immersing the viewer in the experience of the industrial site,

consider whether they are jarring with the rest of your style of landscapes and what the

contrast actually is that they are offering. For example if you had managed to get in

closer for Failed Corn or fill the frame with foreground stalks, as if it were a fence or

barrier, could that have worked paired with Hellaby Industrial Estate image 1?



Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

Spend some time before the next assignment working on the navigation of the blog and

assigning posts to the appropriate places. On the surface this is shaping up well, but the

lack of drop down menus will slow viewing down and make it very difficult to find all the

evidence of the full breadth of your work.

On blog under assignment heading use sub-titles eg assignment planning & research,

initial submission, reflection and rework.

Continue to use the Harvard Referencing System for citing images, quotes and

illustrations. http://www.oca-student.com/content/harvard-referencing-system-1



Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

• It More independent research and analysis of images beyond that which is presented

in the handbook would have benefitted this assignment.

• Dawn Woolley’s posts on adverts are strong examples of the structure and depth to

which we can analyse images, their context and potential meaning. Here’s the first

one in the series: http://weareoca.com/photography/looking-at-adverts-1/

• When conducting independent research, avoid excessive quantity over quality. Spend

time identifying relevant work and prioritise artists, which directly relate to chosen

subject matter, ideas or technical approaches you are experimenting with. Develop a

consistent depth of analysis throughout – if it helps, set yourself a baseline

framework, so that you always cover key areas of analysis.


Learning Log

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

• Look to see if it is possible to remove the ‘older posts’ button at the bottom of each

page, this seems to occur after only a few posts and is better if viewers are able to

scroll for longer, looking back over past posts without having to click onto new pages

this frequently.

• Differentiate between independent research and course material content – we

discussed ways to do this, including placing assignment-specific research within your

assignment planning drop-down menu and coursebook related exercises and research

points within coursework.

• Add further evidence of editing process and decision-making; eg document print

selection with photography of prints laid out in various sequences etc. Where books

are reviewed, take photos of pages of interest or open spreads that illustrate your

points or opinion

Suggested reading/viewing



Explore sources such as those below, to discover the work of other photographers in

addition to those in the course reading list. Join mailing lists, follow social media

platforms to hear about events, developments and discussions in photography.

European Prospects – http://europeanprospects.org/artists

– visual database of European photographers nominated from institutions and

experts from all over the continent.

Conscientious Extended – a great resource, particularly to help think more about

photography and communication, rather than just as a means to create pictures.


The Guardian’s photography pages:


Hotshoe International: http://www.hotshoeinternational.com

Source Photographic Review: http://www.source.ie

1000 Words Photography online magazine http://www.1000wordsmag.com

Photomonitor: http://www.photomonitor.co.uk

British Journal of Photography: http://www.bjp-online.com/

Image Makers, Image Takers (publication) by Anne-Celine Jaeger


Introduces you to a wide range of photographers working across a range of genres,

interviews with them regarding technique and major projects

You mentioned being drawn to ideas of the unseen and health – consider what defines

something as being unseen? This doesn’t have to be literal, but a catalyst for your

imagination… what about under-representation and marginalization, people, things or

issues that are ‘unseen’ in society or ignored.

Martina Mullaney – Turn In (photographs made in night shelters and homeless hostels)



Peter Granser – Alzheimer (be sure to also read the introduction)


Mishka Henner – Dutch Landscapes, 2011


Also, you could consider that which lies behind a façade, whether of a person or a

building or site…Edgar Martins – Time Machine


Pointers for the next assignment / assessment

Try to put in place at least two or three developments outlined above when researching,

planning and producing Assignment 2. Try to conduct any re-work and uploading of

additional planning notes for A1 as soon as possible and try to have all content from the

initial submission is uploaded/tagged appropriately so it can also be checked at A2.

Own notes from tutorial

I have compiled a list of the main points from my tutorial. I am going to make amends going forwards and will not retrospectively change my blog. I want to do it this way as I want to demonstrate and evidence my learning.

  • assignment due 12th May
  • tutorial planned for 24th May at 2030
  • images were received in a well wrapped package and printed to a good standard
  • my images were meant to be viewed as pairs – send them in that order i.e. the order they are to be seen
  • experiment with printing. May be a pair side by side on a panorama (OK to fold but explain to you why they are folded)
  • label my prints on the reverse
  • my prints were consistent which is good, maintain consistency of prints
  • project 3 on my blog was too lengthy. Highlight one/two images and then reduce size as assessors will not have time to scroll down a series of large images
  • try and remove “OLDER POST” tick box from blog if possible (not yet found a solution)
  • on my blog under my assignment heading use “sub titles e.g. assignment planning, submission, research, reflection and rework
  • my learning log duplicates much information. Where practicable eliminate the need for duplication
  • when doing independent research, do not go for quality over quality. Look at more select artists and make comment and written reflection where possible.
  • differentiate between own extended research and course research
  • prioritise what artists I study
  • marry up prints with captions e.g. my industrial set all have the same caption
  • show editing choice e.g. spread of 6×4 images on a table. snapshot this and include in blog
  • show my assessment work for EYV as a post prior to submitting next assignment
  • use OCA forums
  • my prints were acceptable submission